Contest Ratings

10 Originality
I guess this one gets points on this one, because so far in this contest it's a fairly original theme. But...it was so short I couldn't get a good feel for it. Also, the "Hey Daria, Let's Tag Along With Trent" idea is getting REALLY old. I almost fear fanfics that do that now. And the ending sucked so much, it was so short. If this were developed into an ACTUAL STORY I could see it being okay. This is more of a summary.

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0 "Trueness" to the show
When was Daria so openly eager to go anywhere for FUN? ESPECIALLY to an amusement park, where she would inevitably get motion sickness. Also, Quinn doesn't watch SSW. And they really never have a conversation unless they have to.

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5 Fits the title
It would have, and it started to, but then it rained. And they were never in Wonderland. So it didn't fit.

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13 Spelling, grammer, punctuation
Mispunctuated stuff here and there. This is the only area where this person could salvage points.

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0 Humour
This was too short to be very funny, and it was so freaking formulaic that I wanted to cry. I got to the end and was like, "Wait, did I miss something?" There weren't any attempts at original humor that I could see. And the few there were just fell. And crashed and burned.

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1 Over-all impression
Well, I appreciate correct spelling. At least there were no fake swears in this one. It was just TOO DAMN SHORT! Plus, the ending bites the big one. "It rained. Let's watch a movie." That was so inconclusive I could have screamed. Nothing happened in this fanfic. It wasn't even worth the phosphors used to display it, or the 10 minutes that went into writing it. To the author: Don't quit your day job. And TRY next time?

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29 Total Score


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